Friday, January 7, 2011
The best computer
The most state of the art computer around has to be by the apple product which is the Mac line . Known as the rolyty of computers these computers seem incapable of ever getting a virus or freezing up on the owner. With a apple on tue front of the product and very slick design. The Mac stands tall against it rvials. It is a king or queen in its own right but what will happen tweent years from now when computers will become more faster. Computers will be more high speed and less like a laptop or pc and more like a cellphone. Computers will become the next computer.
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'to be by the apple product which is the Mac line .' rephrase.
ReplyDelete'rolyty' check spelling
comma after computers
'of ever getting a virus or freezing up on the owner.' --suggest "of ever getting virus' or freezing."
'With a apple on tue front of the product and very slick design.' This is a fragment. Check spelling.
comma after right
twenty ...faster[?]
'Computers will become the next computer' To the readers it sounds like your saying the same thing or comparing the same thing to what it origonally was. So, I would switch 'next computer' to something better.
I totally agree with cherish. Macs are the best top-of-the-line computers in the world. When you first buy the mac, all of the most used features and more are already set on the computer.
ReplyDeleteYour small excerpt is good,but if you can, try to fix a few minor errors.
Need to check you spelling and other grammer.
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